Spy Fox Writing

Hi Bloggers and Friends,

Today I am posting my writing about Spy Fox

My goal for my writing this week is to use strong describing  words.

I would like some feed back about how well I have used my goal. I have not finished my writing and I 'm still working on my goal to complete it.

You can give me feedback by scrolling down to the commenting thing. The high light ones are the describing words. 

Here is my Writing

In the lovely freezing world in the sea there was a Penguin family. There was a Mummy penguin ,  Daddy penguin and a Baby cute shy penguin.

They loved being on there cold iceberg. They felt happy of their baby penguin. The baby penguin took his first time diving into the icy ocean.

Then there was a laser the iceberg and his family disappeared. Now the Little sad Baby penguin is  lonely.

Next Spy fox was getting ready for his date . But he had a mission to do . Then he left in his flying black car. He was in a bush spying the sardines to find a way in. He used his grabbing hook to get up . He smash one sardines.

Then he went through a vent. Then he saw Dr Hammer shark. He was evil. Then he use a sardines to cover him. Then he said Dr Hammer.

Thank you Readers for reading and commenting on my blog .